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“One of us will meet you there. If we’re not there by seven o’clock tonight, find Snape.” Harry’s face scrunched up and Remus got a whiff of dislike and was it... fear? “Harry.”
“Yeah, all right,” he said, but he didn’t look happy about it. It was a very James-ish look. “Will you get Padfoot?”
“I’ll do what I can.” Remus hugged him, aware that this could possibly be the last time he ever saw Harry – unless someone decided to let Harry visit him and Sirius in Azkaban, which was highly unlikely – and then gripped his wand firmly and headed for the door. “Ten minutes!” he called over his shoulder.
Enjoy!
MarauderLover7.
Hello this is Tazzi. I wanted to answer your response to my review. :)
ReplyDeleteI kind of figured that your reason for having Peter so close to Remus was to induce excitement of how close, but so far he is. Also I understand completely about needing the reveal for later because of the plot and future chapters.
As for who has Peter, it's Draco isn't it? That's what I assumed a few chapters back when Draco was comparing his Rat to his brother's who could do tricks - his rat could not. I remembered from 'The Prisoner of Azkaban' that Ron was offered another Rat that was doing tricks and I liked the similarities you drew there.
Also you're welcome for the constant reviews. Thank you for the praise on the reviews as well. I didn't know I was such a good reviewer. Haha, I know that when I have a new story or chapter I love as detailed feedback as I can get - even if it's just saying their favorite parts. So I try to leave reviews that the author can use to work on there story or encourage them farther. Considering your writing is about as close to perfect as you can get, I try to encourage you to continue writing because your story is amazing! As for being engaged in the story - you bet I am.
This story is so unique and fresh, I love it! I normally don't like stories that change the plot of the original books and try to say clear of them, but your story drew me in from the first chapter.
Sirius was always a favorite character of mine, so I'm a sucker for stories involving him, but your story hardly seems like a fan-fiction to me. The writing is so good and well done that I never know completely what to expect. I like how you have made the story completely your own. It's so nice and wonderful to see such an amazing story.
I can honestly say you are a huge inspiration to me and I could only hope to be one hundredth as talented as you are. I attempt to write, but I'm no where near your level.
Please continue keeping up the amazing work.
Thank you again,
Taz
Hi! :D Aww!
ReplyDeleteYes, that's exactly right! I couldn't have phrased it better myself: 'how close, but so far'. :)
Interesting deductions. :) I won't say who has him, though, sorry. :P I was just wanted to run it by someone to see what their current perspective of the whole thing is. :P
You're welcome - I figure if someone's taken the time to write me a message, then they deserve to have one written back. You're a brilliant reviewer, because you give me lots to address in my responses, and you always send such well thought out questions or deductions. :)
Aww! I don't know about perfect - I still make a few grammar errors, I'm afraid, and sometimes I feel like I let the characters prattle on too much - but thank you anyway! :D Haha, encouragement is always welcome; as much as I love to write, this is such a huge project that sometimes I wonder if I was crazy for taking it on, particularly when study and work get hectic. :P Reviews are a great reminder that people are interested in what I have to write and often motivate me to finish a chapter early; I like to keep my readers happy! :D
Thank you. :) I don't normally write things that change the plot; most of my other stories are all Marauder-era and cover things that probably did happen. Then this plot hit me like a bludger and I couldn't help myself. :P A story like "Innocent" is so divergent from the real series that it risks being a bit polarising, so I'm really glad to hear that you like it anyway. :)
Mine too! He's one of my favourites to write, but also to read about. :)
Thank you! Haha, that's good - I don't like my plots to be too transparent; it's good to keep readers on their toes (one of the many things I learnt from reading J.K.'s work - she's such a brilliant author. :D). I do try - as much as I wish I was, I'm not J.K. and so I try to use that fact to my advantage, by adding my own flavour to the things I write. So, though I'm using her world and her characters, I've also introduced some of my own and the plot's mine too. :) Thank you! :D
Aww!!! :D I'm sure that's not true - writing's just practice and you've got got such a good grasp of the Harry Potter world/characters that you're probably a very good author. :) I didn't realise you wrote - can you send me a link to your stories, or can I get there via your HPFF account page?
I will. :)
Thank you again, haha. :D
MarauderLover7.
Haha, I figured you wouldn't say. I hope I got it right, I didn't really give a lot of thought when I read that part because I was just like "Oh Draco has him, hmmm..." So I'm hoping I'm not giving you a bad perspective, because I hope I just didn't read it wrong.
DeleteI think as far as grammar errors go, yours are very easily fixable and useless I'm really being knit picky (I'm not) they are not a big deal and they don't take away from your story. I've seen where grammar errors go bad and you are fine and far from it. :D
I feel the same about reviews. It's always nice to see someone took the time and reviewed - even a few sentences are nice. But I can understand juggling school, work and writing. So it's always nice to see someone is interested.
And it's always kind of nerve-wracking to change the plot, some can do it really well and others can't really. I think that the way you approach it stays true to the characters but also adds your own flare that makes it you. You have a very JK like style, but it is your own. I can't explain it well, but you're style is very unique and it's very well polished for a fan-fiction. I was very impressed when I found your story. :)
Haha, writing isn't as much as my talent as it is yours. That doesn't mean I don't try and don't enjoy it. It just means that the outcome isn't as pretty and beautiful as your story. I do have a few stories up, some I'm rather embarrassed of because they are in serious need of being rewritten or taken down (it was my first two attempts...) I have one story that I'm currently working on, though. It's kind of drastically outside my comfort zone, but I enjoy writing for it. I just didn't realize how long it was going to actually be. I feel like I'm putting more effort into it than my others because I have a very distinct plot I have to work off of and I'm trying to add others to it as well. You can find my stories through my Tazzi account or here is a direct link: http://www.harrypotterfanfiction.com/viewuser.php?showuid=207019
I warn you, I'm defiantly not as good as you are and I probably have far more grammar error. I've been meaning to go through and revise it sightly, but school has been kind of crazy, so I've just been working on keeping up with my chapters.
Thank you again, :)
Taz
You're getting to know me well. :P No, it's a good perspective - just what I was looking for. :)
DeleteThat's good. Every now and then I'll look through for any to fix but I always seem to miss some. :S Phew. :) I've read stories like that too and it bothers me, so I'm glad you don't think mine are too distracting. :)
Exactly. :) Haha, yes, it can get pretty busy, can't it! It is. :)
I was so nervous about an AU story, but once I got the idea, I just had to write it. Personally, I think characters will take a story a long way; if the characters are likable then readers will be more likely to want to know what happens, even if the plot is lacking. I try to keep my characters as true to the books as possible (because they were so wonderful there) but with all the plot changes, it's inevitable that they'll change a little bit. I'm a bit worried that Harry will be unrecognisable by the time I've finished this. :P Aww. :)
Aww. :) I think writing's everyone's talent and honestly, I'd pick a story that's been written by someone that enjoys to write over one written by someone that doesn't every single time. :) A writer can get everything in their story perfect, but if they don't enjoy writing, it always shows and the story will feel flat.
Don't be embarrassed of your work, ever. :) Be proud of what you achieved back then, and, if nothing else, use it to see how much you've developed as a writer since then. :)
I've discovered it's good to test your comfort zones. :) Haha, it's strange how stories seem to end up longer, isn't it? I'd only intended "Innocent" to be 100,000 words or so, but it just keeps going. :P Ooh, I'm intrigued. I'll have a look when I have a spare few hours to sit down and do it justice. :)
I know what you mean about school, don't worry about that! :P
You're very welcome. :) And thank you again. :)
MarauderLover7.
Haha, well I just kind of figured since it seems like an important piece of the plot. If you gave it away then I wouldn't be as surprised compared to not telling me or just letting me figure it out myself. Plus that is what I would do... :)
DeleteI think that your characters are well rounded and developed very well. You're plot is also very interesting. It has similar aspects of JK's books, but you are not copying it exactly (of course) and it's turning out really good and stands well on it's own. Don't get me wrong, I love the Harry Potter books, but your story can rival it and I can't pick which I like better. I like them both a lot and your story has more interactions between my favorite characters. I mean I love Sirius, Remus, Tonks and Mad-Eye and with them being more minor characters they didn't get as much time to develop like your story.
As for the changes in characters I really like your Harry. I'm looking forward to seeing him grow and develop overtime and I don't really expect him to be completely the same, if at all. You are completely right that your plot might make him unrecognizable from the original, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. It makes sense for him to be different, after all he now has not one, but two parental figures in his life and not just the Dursleys. If he did stay the same then it wouldn't make as much sense because the character developed differently in both stories. Harry didn't really get Sirius as a parent, because he was too busy being on the run. There were a few moments in the Fourth and Fifth book (not really as much in the Third) but those times were limited and you have already had Harry spend more time with Sirius than in the actual book. So I think Harry changing would be normal from a writers perspective and I'm looking forward to it. :D
As for my writing, I think I'll look at my old stories as how much I have grown - even if it was just a little. I do wish to go back to a few of my older stories and revise them, because I do have a few ideas for them. I just don't think now is the right time.
And testing my comfort zone has been good so far - I think...
It's an interesting experience and I'm always eager to see what everyone thinks of my new chapters.
And it would mean a lot to me if you get to look at it in your spare time, if you really want to. I understand if you don't like it - don't worry. It's kind of a weird plot that I thought of one day and started running with it. It has Sirius as a main character though...so that's a plus, right?
Anyways, thank you for responding again and you're welcome. :)
Taz
Haha, pretty much. No, I try not to give things away - it can be hard not to sometimes, particularly when I'm not sure about an idea; there have been times when I've almost asked what readers would prefer to happen, but it would ruin the surprise somehow, and it's going to be impossible to please everyone anyway. :P
DeleteThank you. :) I put a lot of effort into my characters, but more often than not (when I'm in a productive mood) I tend to just let them write themselves. Most of them have such strong personalities that I can just let them go and they'll do what they need to. :)
I'm glad you think so - I try to keep my plots interesting, and one of my favourite things about "Innocent" is trying to form connections between characters with nothing in common (ie. Remus and Tonks) and arrange for them to meet.
Wow! :D I've never been told that my writing is almost preferable to the actual Harry Potter series. :O That is actually amazing to hear. :D :D :D Thank you! :D
Yes, "Innocent" is (obviously) a story that focuses on Harry, but he is not the sole focus in it. Because of that (and also the switching POVs) I'm able to give other characters more screen (page?) time, and that allows them to develop. :)
Aww, thanks! :D So am I, to be honest. I still haven't completely worked out how he's going to turn out, but I'm very interested in the process so far. He's already come so far. (Is it odd that I'm proud of him?). I think parental figures make all the difference. He's getting that love, support and guidance from a younger age and so he's more confident both in himself, and in his wizarding abilities. :) No, in the real books, he didn't, and - while it worked for the series - I loved their interactions so much that I always wanted to see more. :)
It's a good idea. :) Revisions are always good. :) I did that with "White Flags"; I had a whole heap of scenes (mostly including Marlene) that I took out originally, and then decided to put back in a few months after I'd finished the story. It is a time consuming process, so finding the right time is crucial. :)
That's good. :) If nothing else, it helps develop you as a writer. :) Exactly. :)
I will definitely have a look. :) I don't have anything on tomorrow afternoon, so I've decided that's my official reading time. :) Yes, Sirius is definitely a plus. :D
You're welcome, and thank you - haha, we seem to say this a lot. :P
MarauderLover7.
P.S. Chapter 25 is now up. :)